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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby Pyrokinesis » Mon Oct 04, 2010 9:31 pm

Maybe if Inuyasha was a better anime :/

I know this isn't great, but it isn't exactly a top priority. I have school and church, plus im president of an anime club. I have till the end of november to finish this, so i'm not in any hurry. I'll re edit it when im finished.
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby timfoss » Tue Oct 05, 2010 12:53 am

Pyrokinesis wrote:Maybe if Inuyasha was a better anime :/

I know this isn't great, but it isn't exactly a top priority. I have school and church, plus im president of an anime club. I have till the end of november to finish this, so i'm not in any hurry. I'll re edit it when im finished.


No offense intended, but it doesn't just need to be edited, the story itself and a lot of things in it need to be completely reworked.
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby warhol » Thu Oct 07, 2010 9:46 pm

Deadline? lolforwhat
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby RinuX » Fri Oct 08, 2010 5:39 am

neo-akashi... what a bad name, sounds like a fan of naruto and matrix, aged of 12 would create a novels about something TOO MUCH (i mean a mix between all the influence that the kid has...)
I don't know your age, & I think I don't wanna know !

anyway, i tried to read everything, and finally i can't do that !
it's TOO MUCH (see my definition in context above !)
it's too ugly : i talk about the format... (paragraph...)

use BBCode for making this beautiful to see, and maybe we'll read (or at least watch) & we'll maybe take it seriously (if we don't read because... OMG) !
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby Pyrokinesis » Fri Oct 08, 2010 4:27 pm

Neo = New
Akashi = City in japan

Akashi was rebuilt so it is Neo-Akashi... it isn't that hard to comprahend.

Also, i'm 16.
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby neostriker73 » Fri Oct 08, 2010 4:40 pm

So that means, my name means:

New Striker 73.

Which makes no sense at all! :woot:
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby Electro Tomato » Fri Oct 08, 2010 4:48 pm

Pyrokinesis wrote:Neo = New
Akashi = City in japan

Akashi was rebuilt so it is Neo-Akashi... it isn't that hard to comprahend.

Also, i'm 16.


You don't build a setting at all though. Okay, cool; we have a city in Japan that was destroyed and then rebuilt. I still have no sympathy for those caught in any of the previous events. You go much too fast in one chapter, there is so much here that could be expanded, but instead, this plays out more like a mediocre fanfiction than a real novel.
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby tibiazak » Sun Oct 10, 2010 7:27 pm

Topic trimmed. C'mon guys, keep it on topic.
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby mitch951 » Sun Oct 10, 2010 9:31 pm

what is this i don't even~
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby slashfan7964 » Sun Oct 10, 2010 9:37 pm

mitch951 wrote:what is this i don't even~


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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby mitch951 » Sun Oct 10, 2010 9:40 pm

ty sir.
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby slashfan7964 » Sun Oct 10, 2010 10:00 pm

mitch951 wrote:ty sir.

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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby mitch951 » Mon Oct 11, 2010 12:57 am

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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby Maartah » Mon Oct 11, 2010 5:39 am

neostriker73 wrote:So that means, my name means:

New Striker 73.

Which makes no sense at all! :woot:


Neo- does stand for new, don't criticize him just because you didn't know something.

I got to agree with the majority here, it isn't a good read at all. Lots of mistakes, and some novel fundaments that you kinda missed out on. Now, I don't know if you're planning on distributing this or just giving it out to friends. If it's the first, don't bother. If it's the latter, keep on ging!
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Re: So, i'm writing a novel.

Postby Pyrokinesis » Mon Oct 11, 2010 1:45 pm

The whole reason for writing this is for ffun. And a contest at my school. I'm only competing against about 10 other people and all their stories are either action with no character development or vampires....

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