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Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby motorhead14 » Fri Feb 12, 2010 2:03 pm

Well here it is, took me a week to make this. THis is my frst song i have ever written, it was written with FL Studio 8. It's no very long, only 2:19 but i think it turned out nicely. Since this is my first time doing this i will accept any criticism and advice. Here it is

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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby iamsensay » Fri Feb 12, 2010 2:36 pm

oh man, i dunno if its cos i just smoked or what but i have tears from laughing so goddam hard at this.

i dont even, just.. what? :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

EDIT: Oh man, the cymbal at the end killed me. :2thumbsup: :drool: :laugh:
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby Rapt0r » Fri Feb 12, 2010 2:46 pm

iamsensay wrote:oh man, i dunno if its cos i just smoked or what but i have tears from laughing so goddam hard at this.

i dont even, just.. what? :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

EDIT: Oh man, the cymbal at the end killed me. :2thumbsup: :drool: :laugh:


Oh god this. This sounds like music from a VERY low budget NES game (not a good thing). This is overly reptitive and doesn't have any real content to it.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby OzzyOzrock » Fri Feb 12, 2010 2:53 pm

HAHAHAHAHAHA!

It belongs in a maze game.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby LedfortheHead » Fri Feb 12, 2010 4:09 pm

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Okay, If you want more quality instruments don't use Fruity Loops. Try Pro Tools, Logic Pro, or Garage Band. Maybe you didn't want it in 4/4 time and thats your choice, but that is the easiest to work with when your messing around with your first song. It doesn't sound like you know any theory. Alot of notes were out of place, some made me want to turn it off. Work on it some more.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby Electro Tomato » Fri Feb 12, 2010 6:43 pm

I want to praise you on your use of the diminished fifth interval about 20 seconds in or so but I can't as I know it was by mistake and overall, the song was very bad. You had one theme, and developed it, then left it going for the rest of the song with very minute changes throughout. No real structure, the off time signature seemed more accidental than artsy, and it was simply notes going up a scale.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby OzzyOzrock » Fri Feb 12, 2010 7:08 pm

0:18 sounds incorrect for a bit.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby Electro Tomato » Fri Feb 12, 2010 7:17 pm

OzzyOzrock wrote:0:18 sounds incorrect for a bit.

It is impossible for a song to be incorrect. Music is art and can be displayed however the artist chooses to convey it. However, in this case, he unintentionally discovered dissonance. Dissonance is the yin to consonance's yang. Whereas consonance will be a harmonious agreement of tones, such as a power chord, dissonance is an inharmonious use of uncomforting and tension building tones. He just didn't do it purposely, which negates the premise.
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Postby aander91 » Fri Feb 12, 2010 8:04 pm

Respected bands all over the world will be covering this song.
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Postby acrox999 » Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:34 pm

aander91 wrote:Respected bands all over the world will be covering this song.

Lol.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby Kermit4Prez » Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:40 pm

The whole tone scale is like the most stable scale ever, man.

Good choice.

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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby motorhead14 » Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:48 pm

i actually did the weird offbeat things by using the ping pong effect, before i turned that on it was right on key the whole time virtuelly. Should i turn that off so it can be better? It was in 4/4 time with 145 as the BPM. I don't know if FL messed up or something because some of those notes didn't sound right. I could actually give you the FL Project file to prove it
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby Kermit4Prez » Fri Feb 12, 2010 9:57 pm

Would like.

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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby Rapt0r » Sat Feb 13, 2010 12:38 am

Vai Cavalo needs to cover this. I'm down.
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Re: Chemical Swing (my first song)

Postby aander91 » Sat Feb 13, 2010 3:04 am

aander91 wrote:Respected bands all over the world will be covering this song.

Vai Cavalo needs to cover this. I'm down.


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